Don't English Me

I met up with GM to get Lee's laptop and on my way home I chanced up on a piece of paper where she wrote what appeared to be an essay in English.

Respect

         Why does children nowadays disrespect our country? Even in standing straight and reciting properly.

         We know that Filipinos have deep love for our country. But children today seems that they did not love our country. For standing straight for just a few minutes, why do children can't do it properly? Is it because of modern gadgets and technology?

         

          We, as Filipinos citizens must show respect for our country. Participating on flag ceremonies is just a little thing for us but a big thing for our country. 

          This makes us realize that how can we children be the hope of our future if respecting our country is a hard thing for us. 

          Children, rise up! And respect our country. 

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Boring title

Verb tenses

Examples are incomplete

Prepositional phrases everywhere 

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Baby, there should be a topic sentence. The topic sentence gives the main idea of what you are writing about. 

The title should NOT BE BORING it should match the topic and it should be INTERESTING. It should grab the attention of the reader who in this case is your TEACHER. T_T Seriously, she needs to WANT to read what you wrote. 

Revision: I am not good at teaching the little parts of where the thing you wrote is not okay. I already forgot how to do that since that is no longer my job and I have not have enough sleep yet. So here goes. 

We are so going to have to do this over the weekend because clearly there is something wrong with your language rules absorption. T_T Well, you can do math in  your head so I guess GOD said you can't be perfect. Moving on.

STAND UP

        My mother told me that children nowadays are less respectful of our country. Even the small act of standing up straight during the flag ceremony for singing the national anthem and reciting the "Panatang Makabayan" properly is a challenge for many of them.

        We, Filipinos are known for our love for our country. But children seem to lack this attitude. I don't know if it's because of all the gadgets we use or how most of us were raised but many children are not very patient. 

        As citizens of this country, we must show respect in big ways and small ways. How can we become the hope for the future if we can't learn how to be good Filipinos?

        Discipline is something that we need to learn. So rise up and learn to show respect to the flag, to the national anthem and the country that they stand for.  

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I just realized that it's extremely hard to not use the words that are in my level and ask my sister to understand sentences that contain them. But I am sure we can work on this.